The Writer’s Studio, Level I – Assignment #8 April 28, 2008
Preamble: 3rd person narrator, description of short scene between 2 people. Stay in the moment of the scene. Main character is in distress but doesn’t see it, narrator sees it. Like a camera, pick a scene and describe.
smoke
their eyes meet through the smoke of his cigarette,
she always liked the way he flicked the ashes
stale music permeated the room,
like the smell of beer
her hair highlighted by a neon glow,
reflecting off her glossy lips
she looked like candy,
delicately rolled up in a thin wrapper
its what she usually wore,
when she found her way back to him
as his hangover cleared,
light reflected off her boot buckle
and caught his shattered eye,
drawing a glance downwards
taking a different route back up,
by way of those perfect legs
as she crossed them,
he felt it
the needle hit the groove when she first walked in,
that same record began to play
like a hated old friend,
pure cause and effect
his cigarette gave up its last breath,
with a final deep sigh
curls of smoke twirled around her face,
caressing her hair and closing her eyes
she was quick to light a match,
briefly revealing his look of indifference
but she was too busy controlling fire to notice,
bringing relief to his breath again through the red glow
he ordered her a drink, and another for himself,
then ran his hand up and through his hair
tousling it out of his eyes,
triggering another leg cross
eyes locking but less focused now,
the beat changed as someone fed the box in the corner
prices unchanged, like the selections,
but it still fit them both
their hands joined,
as they left together
